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I think you should go for it. It sounds like you’d be great at it! Good Luck with it all, and I truely think that you’ll do great things with it!
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It has a great basis, But I would include a general reason as to why you chose nursing,…
Because you enjoy helping others and you want to make a difference in your community. What qualities do you posses that would make you a great nurse?
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I think you should have someone who is more familiar with writing and with English edit this for you. There’s some compelling information here, but there are far too many errors, and overall, it isn’t well organized.
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I don’t know how long your personal statement is supposed to be on your application, but this looks OK. You have stated why you want to go into nursing, and described your awards and credentials. Some English grammar details that may or may not help your statement get noticed: “…my father and I were best friends.” “were the organizations in which I participated.” Good luck!
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do what your heart tells you and you will be happy, sometimes people can give you the wrong advise.
follow your heart.
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You have said it all, what you have written gives your reasons for wanting to become a nurse, as well as showing your interest in biology and other sciences.
Good luck…
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First check your spelling..there are some spelling mistakes..You have the essentials and it is personal enough.It works..does it meet certain criteria as far as length and words? Are there any criteria? If not then after fixing the spelling and maybe adding a few ending words like”I appreciate the time these nurses dedicate to caring for others and I feel that I am up to the task also. I look forward to the challenge that will lead me not only to new opportunities,but to new life experiences and my growth as a human being.I look forward to being able to contribute my skills as a nurse to my family and my community.Thank You.”
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My interest in Science started to grow during high school, where I excelled in various fields, one of which being Biology. I was an active member in the Science Club, as well as the Recreational Club where I have learnt to work with big groups of people. My participation in Science competitions and my strong interest in Science have won me many accolades and distinctions.
My true interest however was during the time my father was admitted to hospital with a serious illness, I thought I was going to lose my best friend, and wished that I could have done something to prevent it. My family also has a history of Diabetes. I would want to be able to know what to do to help my family and others in the world control their lives so that they would not suffer the same problems associated with this disease.
Furthermore, during my father’s illness, the nurse that took care of him tried to comfort me by telling me about her own experience in her line of work. She was the one that impressed and interested me into pursuing this career in Nursing. From her, I also learnt that a nurse’s role is very challenging physically, mentally as well as emotionally as you need to know your job well, yet have a balance of empathy and sympathy for the patients.
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